The End Battle

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The mists around the mountains clear to reveal in their center a ring of stones, an easy landmark for travelers to gather.

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Great! Okay, tell me when you're done with this and i'll start it. :)
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K- go for it :lol: *gives the thumbs up* :lol:

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:o Wow. :o Fast reader. Okay, I'll try and start tomorrow. :)
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Songhue wrote:hey see if y'all like this or not.
You should really look into what other people said about this...

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Don't really know where to look. Either you can tell me or just say that you think it sucks for yourself. I thought it was kinda choppy, and I had trouble getting a real feel of the kind of creatures my charecters were. They seemed to come across as almost human even though they only have to eat about twice a week, don't have ex on a regular basis, don't eat the plants themselves but only what they give, come on all colors other than black, and live in a community that's really more like an extended family when it comes to how they are towards each other. If I can't get that across then I didn't do a very good job at writing it, but I was trying not to make it too long. I also admit that I can't spell my way out of a paper bag.

Did I forget anything?
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I know that neither of our story's are perfect but heck... I dont know about you but I'm not going for perfect. *shruggs*

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